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Thursday, April 8, 2010
I like freedom
To day is the end of week.We learn about Citizenship.There are a lot of rights important to us.Everyone living in the United States has basic rights.We are free to go to school,go to work,go to church,go to temple,travel to the world,and we can vote(don't have to pay to a vote).We are living in a country of freedom,and peace.We are very luckier than many other people
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Very nice paragraph! Grammar points: change "we learn about Citizenship" to "we learned about the Bill of Rights", put a space after each comma, and change "very luckier" to "much luckier".
ReplyDeleteToday is the end of week."We learned about the Bill of Rights".There are a lot of rights important to us.Everyone living in the United States has basic rigts.We are free to go to school,go to work,go to church,go to temple,travel to the world,and we can vote(don't have to pay to a vote).We are living in a country of freedom, and peace.We are much luckier than many other people.
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